Can someone edit my OO for me?

[Misty]

Thank you in advance! I would really appreciate it.
I can private message it or email it.

[tgjdlc]

I really, really suggest the following:

http://www.3pspeech.com/the-oratory-team.html

There are also (other) really competent coaches on the site:

http://www.3pspeech.com/the-interp-team.html

Or, as I've known it to be a great source of help over the years, I'm sure there is someone on this site with time who is willing to help you with a quick read/suggestions of your Oratory.

Good luck either way!!!